Writing Part 2
Writing a Formal Email
C1 Advanced Exam
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Writing Part 2
Formal Email
Formal Email
It’s very common to have the option to write a letter or an email in part 2 of the C1 Advanced Exam.
Emails and letters are essentially the same thing, except that one is digital and the other is on paper.
We use the same techniques for both styles.
Time Management
Time Management
Both texts are the same amount of words, and worth the same amount of points. Spend 40 minutes per text. Give time to both plan and check your work:
Planning - 10 minutes
Writing - 30 minutes
Checking - 5 minutes
Length: 220-260 words
Most people want to skip planning and start writing immediately. However, this often leads to disorganized essays. Since you’re being marked on organization, you should plan. You’ll have fewer problems while writing and your work will be easier to read.
Planning
Planning
Here's an example question:
Here is part of an email you have received from a language school in the UK where you once took an English course.
The school has had an excellent year, and has some additional money to spend on giving students a better experience. That's why we are now writing to our former students to ask for advice. This money could be spent on one of these things:
sponsoring one student to study here by providing a free course
taking class trips to special places around the UK
Which option would you recommend and why?
Write your email in 220-260 words in an appropriate style.
What to write about
What to write about
Know your Audience
Know your Audience
In the example above, it states that we are writing to a UK language school. We don’t have a personal relationship with these people, and therefore we have to use a formal tone.
Know the Topic
Know the Topic
This task is a little bit different from the other styles of emails and letters I’ve covered so far. In this task, we need to choose one of the options, and defend our choice.
We have to let the school know how we think they should spend the extra money. The options are between these two choices:
sponsoring one student to study here by providing a free course
taking class trips to special places around the UK
Even if we don’t really have an opinion, it’s always best to pick one and defend it. Our work will be clearer to the examiner, which will help us get a higher score for organization.
I’m going to choose this option: “taking class trips to special places around the UK”.
Another different thing about this task is that we have to choose by ourselves what to talk about. Since I usually use a 3-paragraph layout, I need to brainstorm three reasons and each paragraph will defend a reason.
Three benefits to taking trips around the UK:
Wider impact - More students can benefit from the money
Students will get to know the UK
Hear different accents and dialects
Outline
Outline
Since this is a formal letter, we are going to use a formal greeting and sign-off. Here’s the format that I use:
Format:
Dear Sir/Madam,
Paragraph 1- Say why you are writing to them. (I am writing with regard to…)
Paragraph 2- Bullet point 1 and supporting details
Paragraph 3- Bullet point 2 and supporting details
Paragraph 4- Bullet point 3 and supporting details
Closing statement (if needed)
Yours faithfully,
[Your Full Name]
Here are many ways you could organize your paragraphs. I suggest this way:
Each supporting paragraph should have:
One of the points.
Supporting details.
Example or Reason.
Remember, we need to use logical paragraphs to make sure we get good marks for organization.
190 words actually aren’t a lot. You will not be able to write about too many things for each point. Use this to your advantage, because writing less actually means less chance for mistakes.
Plan your Paragraphs
Plan your Paragraphs
I take the three points and quickly brainstorm the benefits:
wider impact
more students benefit
many people at the language school are young and maybe don’t have money to travel
knowledge of the UK
be better informed about the UK
good for tourism
hear different accents
good for English
talk to more people
Writing the Email
Writing the Email
Here's the question again for reference:
Here is part of an email you have received from a language school in the UK where you once took an English course.
The school has had an excellent year, and has some additional money to spend on giving students a better experience. That's why we are now writing to our former students to ask for advice. This money could be spent on one of these things:
sponsoring one student to study here by providing a free course
taking class trips to special places around the UK
Which option would you recommend and why?
Write your email in 220-260 words in an appropriate style.
Opening Paragraph
Opening Paragraph
The best way to write an opening paragraph is by making reference to the original letter. I also am not addressing it to anyone in particular, so I’ll use a generic greeting. Lastly, I’ll state which side I agree with, and what’s coming in the letter.
Dear Sir / Madam,
Thanks for this exciting email seeking opinions from former graduates about how to spend the university's funds to create better opportunities for current students. Personally, I believe that the most advantageous use of these funds would be to create class trips, giving students an opportunity to travel and see more of the UK. Below I will outline three reasons as to why I think this.
You can see I haven’t added any other details. The details will come in the body of the letter.
Conclusion
Conclusion
We don’t need to add much for a conclusion. It’s usually easiest to just thank them for reading, say you are available to answer questions, and that you look forward to hearing from them.
As you can see, trips are the most effective way of impacting the largest amount of students with the money available. If you have any questions, please don’t hesitate to contact me.
We’ve gone over the word limit. However, remember that that’s okay. You will never lose points for writing too much as long as what you say is on topic and relevant. You will lose marks if you add too many unimportant details. Also, writing more increases the chances for mistakes so try to stay near the word count.
Example
Example
Let’s put it all together with some sequencing words and some editing:
Dear Sir / Madam,
Thanks for this invitation seeking opinions about how to spend the language school's funds. Personally, I believe the most advantageous use of these funds would be creating class trips, thus giving students an opportunity to travel and see what the UK has to offer. Below I will explain three reasons why.
Firstly, using the funds for class trips simply impacts more students. Why sponsor one person when hundreds could benefit? Additionally, many of the school's students are young — a segment of the population that notoriously struggles financially. Due to these constraints, they may not otherwise have the means to visit regions outside of London. The institute would therefore be using these funds to dismantle some of financial barriers young people face, making travel accessible to those in need.
Secondly, the individual regions of the UK have much to offer a language student. Restaurants, local markets, museums, and arts centers all offer excellent opportunities to learn about the UK. They’ll be able to experience different parts of British culture.
Lastly, these trips will enable students to communicate and interact with real native speakers. Each person offers a new accent, a new way of thinking, and a unique learning opportunity. Students will never be able to fully enjoy the breadth of the UK's language diversity if they never leave the school, so it’s a great way to expose them to different styles of English and ways of using English.
In summary, if the school truly wants to make the hugest impact, they should use the funds to create class trips for current students. If you have any questions, please don’t hesitate to contact me.
Yours faithfully,
- Axl
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